Sharing Good Writing

We love sharing snippets of great writing, and here's another, by one of our younger writers, Lucy.

The Battle of the Storm

'Clouds slowly build in the darkening sky.
The rumble of thunder screeches into pelting rain drops.
The first bullet snipes - all the others follow, opening fire, streaking to the shield of the dry earth.'

Great use of verbs in this piece: 'screeches' to convey the sudden onset of rain after that first rumble; 'snipe's; 'streaking'! The assonance in 'streaking to the field'; we can almost hear Lucy's 'pelting' rain in the sibilance. Great battle metaphor, too.

We love you, Lucy! She's already a writer - at YEAR SIX!